Posted by: steve1993 | December 4, 2012

Artifact #4: “Many Meanings” Final Artifact

Here is the link to my Artifact #4 final draft. Hope you enjoy!

Posted by: steve1993 | November 27, 2012

Artifact #4 – Rough Draft

For artifact #4, we are doing something called, “Many Meanings”. We basically choose a word that has great significance to us and create a small piece of art with it. For example, I can choose the word ‘air’ and write about how it has been significant in my life, or other people’s lives, and create a box containing different colored air(?) as my piece of art… It can be a book, or a mobile, or a drawing; it just has to be something physical.

Here’s the link to my rough draft of artifact #4

Posted by: steve1993 | November 20, 2012

Artifact #3: Friend

Here’s the video our group made for our 3rd Artifact. Hope you enjoy!

Posted by: steve1993 | November 13, 2012

Poetry @ Tech Review: Hicok & May

Today I went to the second holding of the Poetry at Tech and listened to two more poets read their poems.

I had an easier time understanding Hicok, since he read with a slower pace with effective pauses. It gave me the time to think over about what each line meant. I was laughing from time to time at his jocular lines and thought in silence when a meaningful phrase came out. Nevertheless, I was unable to fully understand his poems since I lacked the understanding power. A lot of times, I couldn’t understand why people were laughing and it got really frustrating because it seemed as if everyone else could understand it except for me. (This is one of the reasons why I want to take the poetry English II class next semester. I want to understand poems.) The second reader, May, was just downright impossible to understand for me because he read so fast that I couldn’t even catch his words. It was as if he was singing a rap with his poem. He seemed to have memorized all of his poems since there is no way one can read that fast without memorizing the words. However, it did feel meaningful by the way he spoke it. He preached to us with all his might and power. I can feel it in his voice. If I understood what he was saying, I bet I would be very amazed by his poems. (although I am still amazed by the power he reads his poems with)


Posted by: steve1993 | November 13, 2012

“Fragmented Narrative” Presentations – Review 2

Today, there were multiple presentations so now I can write a proper review. Here I go.

Although there were strong points presented by all the groups, I thought the fragmented story of the Crab and the Vacation was the best one for several reasons.

First, it had a very clear fragmentation implanted; the leisurely vacation of a human and the dramatic ‘Romeo and Juliet’ story-line fit together very nicely. Something that could have sounded very boring and dull was presented with skill to turn it into a very interesting story.

The picture slideshow had a great effect on the clarity of the story-line. Stories are bound to be interpreted differently by different people, and sometimes the interpretation goes very far off the original intention of the author. However, this picture slideshow assisted in keeping people’s interpretations more consistent.

Another factor that contributed to the clarity of the fragments was the two different readers. By taking in charge of just one fragment per reader made sure that the audience knew who the story was talking about; Kyuri was taking the role of the human and Anabel was taking the role of the crab. Without this clarity some people would have been lost in the beginning, which would be critical to the effectiveness of the story.

However, there was something that I wished they had done a bit better. They failed to read emotionally in the beginning of the story. Since the story was read to us, and not us reading, they should have taken care to use specific voice to deliver the story to its full potential. Although they did start reading emotionally toward the middle of the story, the effectiveness of the story was greatly compromised since the intro sounded dull.

Nevertheless, great job to this group, I really liked the story! (Now I’ve become hesitant to eating crabs!)


Posted by: steve1993 | November 13, 2012


1. What was your experience of reading Dillard’s essay? Trace your reading experience from beginning to end. What type of reading skills does this essay require?

At first, Dillard’s essay started out just like any other essays with a simple story of how the author had fun ‘hiding’ pennies for people to find. It felt as if it would be a chill story of how they author grew out of the habit, but it suddenly took a sharp turn and the story turned to a very deep and serious topic. The author goes into how people in general are not appreciative of what they already have. She criticizes people who cannot be thankful of small things they already have in life. She calls the symptom dire poverty. She continues on to say that people who do appreciate the small things are in healthy poverty, which sounds very ironic but still does make sense. I’m not sure what ‘types’ of reading skill this essay requires but it certainly requires the reader to be able to picture the situation in their mind and also know how to understand words that may not have been used as their primary meaning.

2. What is a new idea the essay gave you? Or what question do you have?

I think by reading this essay, I got the idea that essays can take huge turns and still make the message very strong and effective. Before then, I thought essays had to be very straight, like the ones we wrote for SAT: introduction, three supporting paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, this essay shows that it doesn’t have to fit the specific form and still manage to be very effective.

3. Which three passages about “seeing” are most interesting to you? What do these passages have in common, and how do they differ?

I really liked how the author created the contrast between the literal ‘finding penny in the middle of the road’ and the metaphorical meaning to it in the first two paragraphs. That was probably the most interesting part in the essay, the great contrast. Another part I liked about the passage is where she describes how sudden precious moments are. She explains this in so many different ways, such as the short flash of light before sun-set. All these passages have something in common; they describe what the author wants to talk about with such clarity and detail that it’s hard not to understand what the author is talking about. She reinforces them with so many example that there will be at least one point of convergence between the reader and author. They only differ in that they talk about different sub-points.

Posted by: steve1993 | November 13, 2012


What was your experience of reading Casey’s essay? Trace your reading experience from beginning to end. What type of reading skills does this essay require?

First of all, I was slightly dissatisfied by the introduction, to be honest. She starts out by mentioning how memory is something that’s very easily forgotten and something that’s taken lightly. It seems to me that she wants to say that her experience changed memory from something insignificant to something grave. However, she compares the memory to her life rather than talking about how its importance changed. I would rather say something like, “However, the importance of memory changed forever after this one event.”
What is a new idea the essay gave you? Or what question do you have?

I did have a question as I read through the essay. It seemed that the author used a word over and over again as she wrote the essay. Is this intentional, or is this something that she forgot to fix? (I figured out later that the purpose of the essay was to describe a word in many different views.

Which three passages about “memory” are most interesting to you? What do these passages have in common, and how do they differ?

I liked the passage where the author talked the “Mount Fugi” moment. It sorta connected most of the passages together and it also allowed the conclusion to make sense to the readers. Without it, the conclusion wouldn’t have made much sense. Another passage that I liked is the first passage after the introduction. It did a great job in creating the building tension by describing the police car outside the window and the young author hugging the teddy bear. The common thing about these passages is that they have specific purpose in the essay and they do a good job at serving that purpose. It’s just that they don’t serve the same purpose (and they shouldn’t do so).

What words might you like to explore?

I would like to explore the word flight, since flight can be interpreted in so many ways and I have a ton of stories to tell about flight. For example, when I was very young I experienced ‘flight’ in a very peculiar way. I was going down a hill with my roller blades on and kinda tripped, and spun a 360 and somehow landed on my feet and continued downhill.

Posted by: steve1993 | November 8, 2012

“Fragmented Narrative” Presentations – Review 1

Well, I’m supposed to write about which presentation was the best, but there was only one presentation today, which was the picture display. So, I’ll go ahead and talk about how this picture display was effective and not effective instead of ranking.

First thought upon looking at this project was, “Wow, they can just take some pictures and print it out? That’s some effort they’ve got there.”

However, I looked through the pictures and thought about the effectiveness of this representation of fragmented narrative and changed my mind. It was actually a very nice representation of fragmentation, since the pictures portrayed each of the group’s members’ life style and hobbies very well, and they all portrayed that all of it happened at tech. Every audience member had something they could connect to in the pictures and saw how other pictures differed from what they did at tech.

One thing the pictures lacked was something they all could have done together, such as reading books together, or eating lunch together or something like that. That would have made the fragmentation much more vivid.

Overall, I was satisfied with the presentation and learned that the amount of work doesn’t necessarily correlate to the effectiveness of the work. I should think better next time and do something that is very effective while it takes less amount of work.

Posted by: steve1993 | October 23, 2012

Artifact #3 Proposal

For artifact #3, we are going to create a piece of work that involves fragments. The term ‘fragment’ may sound unfamiliar to some of you but it’s simple; we see this all the time in movies and books or whatever. Fragmentary work is one that involves the author switching the views from one character to another. For example, in the movie Batman: Dark Knight Rises, we not only see the story in the perspective of the batman, but also of many different characters including the batwoman and the policeman.

1. What subject would you like to explore in a fragmentary form?

I would like to explore art (specifically, music, for me), as I mentioned in my previous post, in a fragmentary form. It would be hard to incorporate fragments in music, for the music can’t just stop and start playing another music. However, one thing that comes close to fragmenting is a duet-type music that play two different music that somehow intertwine very well with each other when played together. (I forgot what it was called but I’m pretty sure there is a term for it) However, fragmenting music with dance and visual art is also interesting to me.

2. What forms of WOVEN communication would you use?

As I proposed in the previous post, I would like to use a movie to create our story. Because it is a movie, it would involve a music, a play, a visual and a plot to intertwine them all.

3. Why does a fragmentary form suit your proposed topic?

Fragmentary form suits my proposed topic because it is a story that involves multiple main characters that would come together at some point during the story. If we were to not use a fragmentary form, we would have to always have all characters in one setting, or a single scene, but that is close to impossible, and if it were to work somehow, it would be very strange. I have never seen a film that did not incorporate fragmentary form. It is just not possible.

Here’s our planning document

Posted by: steve1993 | October 16, 2012


1. Now that you have become familiar with McPhee’s style, what is your experience of reading Skrzyniarz’s essay?

I think because I read McPhee’s essay before reading this, I immediately noticed that the normal text is the story that’s being told by the author and the italic text is the story that’s being told by another person. Although they are two different stories, they seem to take place at the same spot.

2. How would you explain this essay, in a few sentences, to someone who had never read it before? Think about the essay’s content and its form.

This essay is actually two stories told by two different people. One being a diver who went diving at a tourist sight, and another being a slave who worked at a salt shore near by. They tell two different stories that occurred at the same place. However, they both converge on the line that both talks about how they found ‘freedom’.

3. What new idea did you get from the essay, or what is something that puzzles you? Explain.

I think I got all that I needed to get from the previous essay by McPhee. However, I’m not sure whether the two (or more) fragmented stories have to be related to each other. Could it be just random two stories being told at once?

4. Proposal

I was thinking about doing a movie project that involves different artists: musician, painter, dancer, etc all doing their own form of art but are lonely. We fragment the artists in different scenes but later on, they converge into once scene and they perform together and they are happy because now they have a team to perform with.

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